Unsure if this is the right place for it, but I though might as well. Here's a side story I'm working on.
Prologue: http://quick-study.deviantart.com/#/d4d547z
Chapter 1: http://quick-study.deviantart.com/#/d4d54xf
Fo E: Brotherhoof of Steel
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Fo E: Brotherhoof of Steel
Come checkout my DA account and Fallout: Equestria Brotherhoof of Steel: http://quick-study.deviantart.com/
or my FiMFiction account: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2542/Fa ... f-of-Steel
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Re: Fo E: Brotherhoof of Steel
Ok just in case anypony didn't hear, I'm in the process of revising Chapter 1 and 2 of my story, but I need help. While I already have a lot of changes planned for Chapter 2, I got no clue about Chapter 1. I just know it could be better, I just don't know where. So below are the google doc links for both chapters, if anypony see a area when I can improve, or give some spelling or grammar error I missed, let me know in the comments. Also no need to sugar coat your critisim, the more you say the better I can improve.
Chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/14BH ... t?hl=en_US
Chapter 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1C0a ... t?hl=en_US
Chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/14BH ... t?hl=en_US
Chapter 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1C0a ... t?hl=en_US
Come checkout my DA account and Fallout: Equestria Brotherhoof of Steel: http://quick-study.deviantart.com/
or my FiMFiction account: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2542/Fa ... f-of-Steel
or my FiMFiction account: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2542/Fa ... f-of-Steel