Fallout: Equestria Resource

Due to several circumstances, general unwillingness and lack of inspiration, and severe flaws in my current story form, I've come to a conclusion.

I'm completely rewriting this story. Ground up. Characters will be the same, general plot is similar, but honestly, what I have now is pretty bad. Don't expect anything soon.
(Aplogies to Kashin, Ethan, and Dina from the Gdocs, I made you guys review chapters that were later thrown out.)


(OLD CHAPTER)
Chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id ... rfmWOyFV34 (still proofreading, mostly done, thanks Kashin!)
Chapter 2: In proofreading stage. Raw document: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eHl ... Ru8Rc/edit

If you need a pre-reader I could give it a go. I can be a bit on the brutal side, but better to take flack when you can do something about it right?

Fine by me, any review as long as it doesn't wind up being nothing but insults is welcome.

Rippedshadow wrote:Fine by me, any review as long as it doesn't wind up being nothing but insults is welcome.

A good prereader does not insult at all. (S)he gives constructive critic.
To illustrate the difference;

Insult: "THis is shit, should be written differently"
Constructive critic: "This should be better, and here's how you do it..."

Also, I might read this story. My own maincharacter is a "wrench wench", so it might be intersting to see if it's the same concept. And if it is, to see how you've done it.

The title needs work, since it does not match the character at all, other then "This is his name".

I was tossing chapter titles around, and depending on how I end it, I might change the title.

Also, for those familiar with the Fallout 1 & 2 traits, bloody mess is attached to my character at the start. Slightly differently then how it is in-game, but similar. ("Those around you seem to die in more violent, and/or painful ways then normal, friend and foe alike.")

okay, give Kashin1701d@yahoo.com comment privileges and I will give it a run through later this evening.

Aw futs, I turned public commenting off? Aw well. Not sure if I can do that on a mobile device, but I'll give it a go.

Rippedshadow wrote:Fine by me, any review as long as it doesn't wind up being nothing but insults is welcome.

I can't see you getting any insult's from anyone here. We are all wiling to help.

Adding this to my "To-Read" list, so wil give a review when I get to it.

I have a habit of being really cautious when entering a forum for the first time. But, so far, this has is pretty much smack dab in my comfort zone.

Also, on chapter 2, I've been having a bit of writers block, I still make progress, just not as fast as I hoped. I still might need to make a prologue chapter too.

Rippedshadow wrote:I have a habit of being really cautious when entering a forum for the first time. But, so far, this has is pretty much smack dab in my comfort zone.

Also, on chapter 2, I've been having a bit of writers block, I still make progress, just not as fast as I hoped. I still might need to make a prologue chapter too.

Writers block; the bane of all writers. xD