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Moth
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by Moth » Tue Nov 01, 2011 11:29 pm
Hello all!
I'm working on a FoE side story in a visual journal format, sort of a cross of fan-fic and comic.
I'm only 4 parts in so far, but I would like to get some more feedback so I can improve them as I go. So any critiques or suggestions any one has on any aspect of it (from the story pacing, or if things are too subtle, to even the font style) would be appreciated.
http://justmoth.deviantart.com/gallery/33530924
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Arcane_Scroll
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by Arcane_Scroll » Wed Nov 02, 2011 12:04 am
I've been reading it and so far I love it. The concept of using journal pages to tell the story is very fun, kinda hard to read on mobile devices but still fun. The only suggestion I would have is maybe putting the page text in the description as well?
And welcome to the forums!
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otherunicorn
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by otherunicorn » Wed Nov 02, 2011 12:45 am
Page 4 does not translate to text very well!
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by Nightmare Luna » Wed Nov 02, 2011 12:50 am
Oh yes this, been reading this as well. Very good so far, how dare they not give the money back.So rude.
Also page 4 all I have to say after reading is: RockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRock!
When life gives you lemons, it is because there is a horrifying monster in the next chamber with 400,000,000 HP, whose only weakness is lemons.
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Moth
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by Moth » Wed Nov 02, 2011 7:24 pm
Arcane_Scroll wrote: The only suggestion I would have is maybe putting the page text in the description as well?
Ah thanks! I though of that before I started then completely forgot bout it!
I went back and added the text to all of them (I should have saved the text files, I had to write out them all again).
Also, part 5 is up!
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by The Jack » Thu Nov 03, 2011 1:12 am
*reads comments*
Huh. This story is written as if it is the main characters journal?
If so, then it's just like the original Dracula :3 xD
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Moth
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by Moth » Sat Nov 05, 2011 11:13 pm
Does any one know if there is any other rough time line of the the events in FoE (the one on the wiki only goes up to chapter 9)?
I want to avoid bumping too closely into the main story points if I can help it.
And part 8 is up! (I started out planing one part a week, and now I feel like I'm slacking if I don't do one a day
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Nightmare Luna wrote:Also page 4 all I have to say after reading is: RockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRockRock!
Check out part 7
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by Arcane_Scroll » Sun Nov 06, 2011 2:31 am
Moth wrote:Does any one know if there is any other rough time line of the the events in FoE (the one on the wiki only goes up to chapter 9)?
I want to avoid bumping too closely into the main story points if I can help it.
Not that I've seen, it really needs to be updated.
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by Nightmare Luna » Sun Nov 06, 2011 2:58 am
Moth wrote:
Check out part 7
DANTOM! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Hmm Anyway...
No I don't really know of a timeline for it.
When life gives you lemons, it is because there is a horrifying monster in the next chamber with 400,000,000 HP, whose only weakness is lemons.
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by Moth » Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:44 pm
Act 1 is done. yay!
