Fallout Equestria: Hightide

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by DontAskForCookies » Mon Apr 30, 2012 2:34 pm

hummm... I'm thinking a very snake like green should do nicely!

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by DontAskForCookies » Mon Apr 30, 2012 8:39 pm

How dose this look to you?

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by KingofMalta » Mon Apr 30, 2012 9:49 pm

That. Is what I call awesome.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by DontAskForCookies » Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:07 pm

Thanks, If you need/ want anything ells then feel free to ask.

I would love to chat sometime about this project of yours, The whole reason I drew this was because I was watching this thread like a chicken hawk and read your post on the Tunnel Stallions.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by KingofMalta » Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:42 pm

Ah I see! Well If you have any questions fire away. I'll be on the chat tomorrow and will begin the draft for the first chapter barring any unforeseen work obligations.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by DontAskForCookies » Wed May 02, 2012 9:35 pm

and here is my finished version of the cover art for High-tide
Hope you enjoy the final product!

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by KingofMalta » Sat May 05, 2012 6:09 pm

First Draft of the Opening Scene.
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“We are the Alpha and the Omega, the Beginning and the End. To she who is thirsty We will give to drink without cost from the spring of the water of life.”
Sunshine and Rainbows.
My eyes opened to see sunshine and rainbows stretching above me across a blue sky only marred by the occasional puffy cloud. The blue sky stretched from corner to corner of my ceiling only hemmed in by the verdant green forest that grew from my walls, and that was only slightly marred by the wooden paneling of my two room closet and bedroom door. One small corner of my did though give way to a startlingly sudden drop, from the Cliffside I could just make out the cascade of blue and white waves in the far distance. As I saw up my view was completed by the pale glory that was the moon itself that occupied the vast majority of my floor. The white orb was set in a sea of its own, of the purple night and golden stars that sometimes seem to slyly smile at me and invite me so that they could enjoy my company.
My eyes filled with this and only this soon brought to my attention a little fact. This was just a little niggling piece of reality that immediately sent cold fire through my bones and rage coursing through my blood.
“MAITRE D'! I AM AWAKE! WHERE IS MY BREAKFEST? I DEMAND YOUR PRESCENCE! RIGHT! THIS! INSTANT!”
That I had to raise my voice at all only furthered my own indignation! Having to wait like everybody else to receive their first meal of the day! I was Precious! I was daughter of the Overmare! I should not have to ever suffer through such hardship of this or any magnitude. I didn’t have to think if they knew who I was and how important I was! They had known it all their lives so far and would know it until the day they died. Even afterward! It was the duty…ugh…of the Overmare to commemorate each passing in Stable 81 of an inhabitant with a short speech detailing the life of the recently deceased over the Stable radio. Not that anyone but myself lived an interesting life. Some attended the maintenance of the Stable itself, constantly staring at a single dial to make sure the reactors would not spike. Others did ghastly mundane things like maintain every PipBuck in Stable 81 or make sure that all ponies followed the rules. One stallion in particular only cut manes and for him he would do the same thing until he passed on. ‘Granted’ I thought ‘I’d happily give THAT donkey’s flank eulogy and maybe even compose a new Stable Anthem around it!’
A sudden sharp pain in my stomach not only made my eyebrow twitch slightly, but quickly reminded me that my first attempt to gain the attention of my personal pony servant had gone unanswered. I could feel my cheeks burn red as I huffed and puffed air from my cheeks the indignity continued to rise and so did my anger. I began to let the world know once again that I was by no means pleased when the door to my personal room burst open and a small colt, barely fitting into the rumpled and oversized black suit, wobbled into the room balancing a silver tray on his backside. The tray’s silver finery and porcelain containers wobbled and clattered constantly as the young colt seemed to shiver his body across the room to my bedside. Sliding to my side, or as close as he could because I lay in the center of my bed and it could hold several of me (a Princess size bed was just barely a comfy fit), his black fur and white maned face looked at me as he began to mumble “S-s-sorryIwasl-late. Yourlady. Thisismyfirsttime. Ihopeyouwillbegoodto me.”
It took me a few moments to piece together the younger pony’s words, his lips were trembling so bad it looked like he might cry any moment. I blinked at the colt and he blinked back. I took a breath of fresh, recycled air and-
“WHO ARE YOU? MORE IMPORTANTLY WHY WERE YOU LATE! WHERE IS MAITRE’D?”
The young colt staggered back, though in an admitting graceful move slide the tray onto my bedside rather than let it topple to the floor and stain my beloved and priceless mural. If he had the consequences would not have been very pleasant. Not pleasant at all.

“M-my name i-is S-s-stward. I received my-my cutie mark yesterday. M-my father w-was pro-promoted by the O-o-overmare to be th-the Ove-overmare’s assistant.” Steward stuttered on, showing his flank to me where a black bowtie on a silver platter cutie mark adorned his hide.
“You can’t possibly be serious.” I leveled him with a flat stare, unsurprisingly he sharank back to the floor with a slight nod. His eyes averted toward the moon. I hoped he wished to Celestia and Luna that he could immediately be banished to the moon! I sighed rolling my eyes and hoof palming as I silently swore revenge at nopony in particular. Until things with Mother could be cleared up I would be forced to deal with what was given to me. The little shrimp was quickly making my day worse and worse. I could feel it in my horn that this would be the least worst possible thing to happen to me today. The only possible answer for this would be to give ass generously back and beat the hay out of this day. First thing first would be to deal with this…thing.
“Auuuuugh. Very well.” Using my horn magic to bite into fresh haytoast (none of that recycled food for the Overmare’s daughter like the common Stable dwellers), spitting it out into the face of Steward just as he began to feel confident enough to approach my bedside. “Are you an idiot? Are you mad?”
“N-“
“YES!” I interrupted, using my magic to push the tray of food sending it out of my bedroom with the force to embed it into the outside metal wall. While my magic may not be as elegant as my Mother’s or all that controllable I was remarkably gifted with a force of push in my basic telekinesis spell which I had learned early on when I slammed a classmate’s pet rock (its name was Tim or something or other) through the bulletproof glass of the Stable’s only class room (public education was an insufferable period of my life I was more than happy to have ended a year ago).
“I. Do. Not. Eat. Haytoast. Without. Applesauce.” Glaring at Steward with the force of a thousand suns “You. Go. Now.”
Pleased at the way he turned tail before I had finished my sentence I laid back down restfully and began to eat my breakfast that was marginally eatable. Once I was finished I cantered over to the one section of my bedroom that contained the entrance to my closet. A room about the same size of my own bedroom that contained not a mirror and beauty desk, but also row upon row of racks holding my dresses. True, every ‘common’ dweller in Stable 81 was by regulation and necessity of a lack of materials forced to wear the same jumpsuit that had been worn for nearly two hundred years, but then again being the Overmare’s daughter had its advantages in Stable 81. Supposedly in the early days of the Stable the first Overmares had not seemed to care about what they wore or being apart from the commoners. That of course had changed for the better, as did the general population of Stable 81 which at its peak had contained a thousand or so ponies. Normally when a pony dies in Stable 81 their belongings and in some cases certain respectable and important positions (such as being the Overmare) were passed onto surviving family. Whenever a pony dies without family to claim their belongings though their property becomes property of the S table-Tec and therefore property of the Overmare to do with as she wishes, which since my great-great-great-great-great grandmother had been to suit the desires of herself and her descendants.
Concentrating with my horn I wrapped with my magic one Stable barding that had been artistically transformed into a dress complete with sapphire jewels laced into the collar. The dress shakily floated from its hanger and toward me the golden glow of my magic seeming to shiver visibly. The pain of concentration in my skull felt like my brains were trying to be scooped out! Grunting I pushed more magic at the dress which flew across the room like Steward running away and hit me in the face. I was the Overmare’s daughter! I didn’t need finesse or a repertoire of spells (that’s what the other unicorns were for)! All I needed was my overwhelming push in my magic. Acting as if the sapphire bruising my skull had never happened I slipped on the dress with my hooves.
Pushing up a blonde curl with a hoof I looked at myself in the mirror. Teal eyes swept over me, approving of everything they saw…except for a stabbing glare at my covered flank. Spreading the dress over my sides neatly I strode out towards the exit of my rooms and into the areas of the Stable I’d rather not go: everywhere but mine. Before stepping through the door hatch I stopped to look down at a small indentation just to the left of the entrance. Staring at it, it was barely noticeable to anypony who knew what and where they were looking for. If only… no. Shaking my head I trotted out into Stable 81’s gray, dull, common, unappealing hallways.
Immediately I was hit by the stench of…averageness.

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by sargecadet » Sun May 06, 2012 8:58 am

I love this already. I'm intrigued by thus narrator and her insufferable prissiness. I'd really like to see where this story goes. Keep up the good work :)
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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by DontAskForCookies » Sun May 06, 2012 10:54 am

Needs some work but so far you have done a wonderful job achieving your goal of making Precious truly wicked and detestable. This should make her (hopeful) transition to a well rounded pony and possible hero much more rewarding. Also, it will probably make her early hardships much more entertaining, lol.

Now I am going to have to draw picture of her before her release, or maybe one of her poor servant?

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Re: Fallout Equestria: Hightide

Post by KingofMalta » Tue May 08, 2012 1:09 pm

This is the next section. I'm exploring into the nature of Precious herself and give her more depth then just being stuck up but a reason as to why she is stuck up.

In that she views everypony else in the Stable to be ambitionless drones.
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Was Stable 81 big for its size or was it small for its size? The Stable, according to ancient maps posted along every stairwell, had in total nine levels. The first two levels were the entrance to the Stable as well as the Overmare’s office and living quarters for the Overmare’s family (I literally lived above every other pony in Stable 81). The third and fourth levels contained the atrium, medical, security, the cafeteria, and other common areas. Levels five through eight contained living quarters for the majority of the Stable’s residents. Finally level nine was maintenance with the reactor levels which I was glad for as it put the entire Stable between me and the radroaches that occasionally appeared in the lower levels.

It wasn’t the first time I had pondered this, if only to distract her from the ponies that inhabited the stable itself. The population of Stable 81 had once been over a thousand ponies, but over the last two centuries the number of inhabitants of Stable 81 had shrunk leading to entire sections of the Stable to be abandoned. Once upon a time in Stable 81 the Overmare had even lived in the lower levels with the common ponies! Such a thing was the stuff of my nightmares! This had been fantasy since her great-etc. grandmother’s time when the Overmare had decided that some ponies in Stable 81 had to stand and live above the rest. One of the visible changes had been armed escorts for members of the Overmare’s family and posting of security to every stairway entrance on every level in the Stable such as those that bowed to greet me.

“My lady, good morning.”

“Indeed, my lady.”

“Sir Bulletproof. Madam Brute Force.” I replied giving a small curtsy in return for their respect of my station and person. The black and yellow stallion to my left and the red and blue mare to my right stood back to attention on their hooves. The only things in common between the two ponies included that they wore stable security barding and had batons holstered at their sides. Where Bulletproof seemed small for a stallion it was Brute Force that seemed large for a mare. Bulletproof had the tactical edge to get into the right spot for the best advantage while Brute Force simply ploughed on and battered so roughly she was known to cause collateral damage. At least that was what I heard about the two married ponies when they were in their living quarters. As guards on the second level of Stable 81 they didn’t see much action, but were perfect deterrents and I did not doubt they were more than capable at their special talents as security ponies.

“Has Mother called for me at all today?” I looked past them hopefully down the hallway to the very end at a single hatch door that was sealed. Above it an electric sign read ‘Overmare’s Office’.

“No, the Overmare has not sent any messages to you today, my lady.” Brute Force replied, furrowing her brow for some reason. Why does she look so angry? This was not something out of the ordinary. Being the Overmare was the most important position and right in all of Stable 81. She spent days in her office working for order and stability within the stable. At least she had ever since…

“Though, my lady” Bulletproof interjected “Her standing wishes that you have a well and nice day remain unchanged as always” giving me a small smile and a nod of his head.

I buried a small smile that had crept onto my face, shaking my head and waving a hoof as if it was nothing.

“Very well then, if that foolish little colt that is to be my new attendant arrives late with my lunch be sure to make sure he knows not to be late again. Ever.” I ordered moving toward the stairwell.

“With pleasure, my lady!” Brute Force replied with some glee in her voice.

“Now dear, save some of that pent up energy for latter…”

I left the two traveling down just one flight to the third level where I once again exchanged respectful conversation with the security ponies, before walking to the railing overlooking the atrium. Looking down I could see dozens of the common ponies going about their daily business. Some lounged on benches or sat at tables, others appeared from one stairwell or hallway to disappear into another, one or two worked at panels in the walls. “Look at them” I said to myself, my voice undoubtedly filled with contempt “So unappealingly…plain.”
What was it about any single pony below me that made them special or unique? Did any of them stand out from the ponies around them?
The answer was ‘there was nothing’ and ‘NO!’.
They lived every single moment in the stable below me. From birth to death they went about themselves mingling amongst each other content at life in the Stable. When they received their cutie marks it laid out for them what they would do their entire lives and they all happily accepted it. To think if a pony below me received their cutie mark as a PipBuck technician they would all too happily spend every waking minute of their lives doing just that. Why? They would say it was their special talent! Yea right! It was because they had no ambition. They meekly followed the destiny that their cutie mark’s and the Overmare’s authority ordered them to. They were not worthy of any respect or courtesy or even the lives they lived! How every single other pony in everything I called existence irritated me to no end.

Of course I was nothing like them. I was the Overmare’s daughter, but I had no destiny that could be ordained by a higher power! The Princesses were dust in the magical radiated winds no matter what the Stable’s teacher Dull Lecture said about them having transcended to watch over the remnants of all of pony civilization. As Overmare I would…I would…what?

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