The advice thread

[The Jack]

Woho! Finally found the perfect name for the Initiate; namely, "Silves Scales". Scales as in, for weighing stuff. This one is going to be a "dual-talent", like how Velvet Remedy is good at both singing and medicine; Silver is going to be skilled in bartering and diplomacy ^^
Her cutie mark is going to be a weight scale made out of silver

Now I can finally start writing a bit!
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If only I could find time... xD

[Quick Study]

Ok I need some big advice. I posted my story on FiM Fiction and well it currently has a rating of 1.6. So I was thinking about making some serious revisions since it's still very early in the story.

I was thinking about, along with editing the flow of the story, expanding some of the scenes in Chapter 1 and doing the same for Chapter 2, but also add additional scenes too it. I was thinking of adding half of I originally planned of Chapter 3 to it, and ending Chapter 2 with them leaving Cheyeneigh Mountain.

What do yall think?

[The Jack]

Ok I need some big advice. I posted my story on FiM Fiction and well it currently has a rating of 1.6. So I was thinking about making some serious revisions since it's still very early in the story.

I was thinking about, along with editing the flow of the story, expanding some of the scenes in Chapter 1 and doing the same for Chapter 2, but also add additional scenes too it. I was thinking of adding half of I originally planned of Chapter 3 to it, and ending Chapter 2 with them leaving Cheyeneigh Mountain.

What do yall think?

Unfortunantly, I haven't read the story, so I can't say anything
It's on my to read list though, so I'll read that one next time I read anything new.

[Damhoof]

Ok I need some big advice. I posted my story on FiM Fiction and well it currently has a rating of 1.6. So I was thinking about making some serious revisions since it's still very early in the story.

I was thinking about, along with editing the flow of the story, expanding some of the scenes in Chapter 1 and doing the same for Chapter 2, but also add additional scenes too it. I was thinking of adding half of I originally planned of Chapter 3 to it, and ending Chapter 2 with them leaving Cheyeneigh Mountain.

What do yall think?

well lets see. Before I comment i'll go read it over at fimfic.

1) Very obvious spelling errors, and I am sure there is more.

2) It's very short. 2-3 k words per chapter? really? ;<

3) you aren't hanging in the all time best chatdoc for all things FO:E

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kao ... 7u11eq2n2j

[Quick Study]

1. Yea I was expecting things like that. It one the reasons why I started writing, to fix that.

2. I really rushed through those chapters, but I was going to make each chapter from then on at least 5k.

3. Not sure I understand the comment, could you clarifiy.

Also from what you've seen, do you think a rewrite would be a good idea. To firm up the foundation of the story and characters better then I have. I will say if I do Chapter 1 will grow to maybe 3k and Chapter 2 will grow to 4-4.5k.

Edit: Actually you know what I am going to revise Chapter 1 and 2. There are a lot of things I could have gone over better. Plus with how I was going to write Chapter 3, it was going to have them enter the Wasteland half way through the chapter, and I think something like that would be better served at the end of one. I'm going to take down Chapters 1 and 2 on FiM Fiction, but leave them up on DA with a notice of revision.

[Kashin]

3. Not sure I understand the comment, could you clarifiy.

I believe you are being asked to join, as The Side Stories Compilation chat is sort of like the advice thread with plenty of friendly folk who would be willing to help you doctor your work and one hobo posting random things (is funny not annoying).

[Quick Study]

Ah well I guess I'll start doing that. Didn't relize there was a chat room for this.

[Rippedshadow]

Hmm, someone linked me there before, I guess I should get on the ball and join it as well.

[Damhoof]

1. Yea I was expecting things like that. It one the reasons why I started writing, to fix that.

2. I really rushed through those chapters, but I was going to make each chapter from then on at least 5k.

3. Not sure I understand the comment, could you clarifiy.

Also from what you've seen, do you think a rewrite would be a good idea. To firm up the foundation of the story and characters better then I have. I will say if I do Chapter 1 will grow to maybe 3k and Chapter 2 will grow to 4-4.5k.

Edit: Actually you know what I am going to revise Chapter 1 and 2. There are a lot of things I could have gone over better. Plus with how I was going to write Chapter 3, it was going to have them enter the Wasteland half way through the chapter, and I think something like that would be better served at the end of one. I'm going to take down Chapters 1 and 2 on FiM Fiction, but leave them up on DA with a notice of revision.

Well, you see the proto doc is where some of the authors of all things FO:E hang out in. The chat in in the upper right.

I can totally help proofread the finished product and stuff. But i do prefer Google docs for proofreading. HANG OUT WITH US PLEASE.PLEASE.PLEASE.PLEASE.

and for 2) It really helps if you have a scope of where you wish to end the story. This will allow you to proportion out your chapters so your character doesn't max out early on in the story.

[Kashin]

2) It really helps if you have a scope of where you wish to end the story. This will allow you to proportion out your chapters so your character doesn't max out early on in the story.

It also lets you do foreshadowing up the wazoo and load up a Chekhov's Armory (you don't need to use all of them, but they are nice to have on hoof ).