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Re: The advice thread

Post by The Jack » Thu Nov 10, 2011 2:29 pm

So. I think internet ate my previous post;
I am currently developing a third character for my fic. He's roughly 13 years old, a unicorn, and his special talent is stealth. His coat is light blue, but I don't knwo his manecolour yet, nor his eyes.
So I'm wondering... Does anyone have a good name that would be "stealthy"?
Not to mention, does anyone have a good symbol for stealth?
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Damhoof » Thu Nov 10, 2011 2:44 pm

The Jack wrote:So. I think internet ate my previous post;
I am currently developing a third character for my fic. He's roughly 13 years old, a unicorn, and his special talent is stealth. His coat is light blue, but I don't knwo his manecolour yet, nor his eyes.
So I'm wondering... Does anyone have a good name that would be "stealthy"?
Not to mention, does anyone have a good symbol for stealth?
Being Stealthy? Earth ponies fit that bill perfectly.
At least I have made unicorn stealth harder without aid of magic. By that i mean harder then regular stealth.

Something Indian or enviromental I would guess for the best name..

Lets see here. That is a bit wierd. Light blue is shit for stealth xD

I guess, cloud walker for his "silent hoofsteps and tendency to disappear." or Hidden Sky because the sky is always hidden and his mane is like the sky.
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Kashin » Thu Nov 10, 2011 2:49 pm

The Jack wrote:So. I think internet ate my previous post;
I am currently developing a third character for my fic. He's roughly 13 years old, a unicorn, and his special talent is stealth. His coat is light blue, but I don't knwo his manecolour yet, nor his eyes.
So I'm wondering... Does anyone have a good name that would be "stealthy"?
Not to mention, does anyone have a good symbol for stealth?
A name... well Spot Check would be a nerd one and you would get to call the kid Spot, Blind Spot, thats all I have for now. As for the mark It would depend on how he discovered his talent, if it was from fear his mark could easily be two eyes from under a bed, you could even go with a pony siluet that is so close to his coat color that it is only visible in certain lite or under close inspection (he actually had his mark for weeks, but no one noticed)
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Re: The advice thread

Post by The Jack » Thu Nov 10, 2011 2:52 pm

Damhoof wrote:
The Jack wrote:So. I think internet ate my previous post;
I am currently developing a third character for my fic. He's roughly 13 years old, a unicorn, and his special talent is stealth. His coat is light blue, but I don't knwo his manecolour yet, nor his eyes.
So I'm wondering... Does anyone have a good name that would be "stealthy"?
Not to mention, does anyone have a good symbol for stealth?
Being Stealthy? Earth ponies fit that bill perfectly.
At least I have made unicorn stealth harder without aid of magic. By that i mean harder then regular stealth.

Something Indian or enviromental I would guess for the best name..

Lets see here. That is a bit wierd. Light blue is shit for stealth xD

I guess, cloud walker for his "silent hoofsteps and tendency to disappear." or Hidden Sky because the sky is always hidden and his mane is like the sky.
Ah, well, yeah.
I made him a unicorn because I don't want any pegasi, and I find earth ponies kind of boring. Besides, he's got himself a stealth spell which is nifty.
I made his coat a horribly non-stealthy colour on purpose. xD
I was about to make him bright pink actually, but I figured htat nobody but Pinkie can pull that off properly.

Those two names, Cloud Walker and Hidden Sky both sound too... pegasus. xD
Thanks for the try though :P

@ Kashin: Hmmm... "Blind Spot" sounds good. Not sure what his nickname would be though. "Blind" sounds wierd, and "Spot" sounds like a dog. xD
The cutie mark is more out of a desire to remain hidden, not noticed, out of sight. It has something to do with not being very good at protecting himself, plus some more backstory. :P

Though the cutie mark suggestion (with the outline) was very good. Might be using that one unless I find something better.

Cutie marks are surprisingly difficult to find at times. xD
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Kashin » Thu Nov 10, 2011 2:57 pm

You could always make him a compulsive liar and make his nickname BS.
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Re: The advice thread

Post by The Jack » Thu Nov 10, 2011 3:00 pm

Kashin wrote:You could always make him a compulsive liar and make his nickname BS.
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Why can I never come up with awesome stuff like that?
I'm going to have to credit you for half the stuff in thsi story. xD
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Quick Study » Thu Nov 10, 2011 3:32 pm

Damhoof wrote:
Quick Study wrote:1. Yea I was expecting things like that. It one the reasons why I started writing, to fix that.

2. I really rushed through those chapters, but I was going to make each chapter from then on at least 5k.

3. Not sure I understand the comment, could you clarifiy.

Also from what you've seen, do you think a rewrite would be a good idea. To firm up the foundation of the story and characters better then I have. I will say if I do Chapter 1 will grow to maybe 3k and Chapter 2 will grow to 4-4.5k.

Edit: Actually you know what I am going to revise Chapter 1 and 2. There are a lot of things I could have gone over better. Plus with how I was going to write Chapter 3, it was going to have them enter the Wasteland half way through the chapter, and I think something like that would be better served at the end of one. I'm going to take down Chapters 1 and 2 on FiM Fiction, but leave them up on DA with a notice of revision.
Well, you see the proto doc is where some of the authors of all things FO:E hang out in. The chat in in the upper right.

I can totally help proofread the finished product and stuff. But i do prefer Google docs for proofreading. HANG OUT WITH US PLEASE.PLEASE.PLEASE.PLEASE.

and for 2) It really helps if you have a scope of where you wish to end the story. This will allow you to proportion out your chapters so your character doesn't max out early on in the story.
Actually I do have some major events to happen throughout the story. I was just trying to speed though it too much, but I've learned my lesson.
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Rippedshadow » Sat Nov 12, 2011 11:48 pm

I need a bit of help deciding a color combination for an alicorn foal. She'll be on the main character's side of the story conflict, and is technically partly related to a grey-coated and black-maned character, but the other part is from a unity alicorn.
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Re: The advice thread

Post by Imperiumofman » Sun Nov 13, 2011 12:44 am

I hope there's a damn good explanation and backstory for that combo of events. Especially since the alicorns (like super mutants) are sterile. It sets off a few alarms in the back of my mind.

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Re: The advice thread

Post by Rippedshadow » Sun Nov 13, 2011 12:57 am

Sterile? Then everyone has mixed opinions. Everyone at the resource doc says they're not sterile. I'll have to do some digging later.

And yea, a better explanation would require a long paragraph, and would be spoileriffic.

Thankfully, I can still change things later if everyone spazzes out about that part of the poor thing's origin. Then it would just involve more (pregnant) mares dieing in her creation.
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