Fallout Equestria: Endless Night (Critiquing required)

[Traendeth]

Hey everypony so a few weeks back i decided to write my own side story after reading Fallout Equestria and chapter 44 of Project horizons.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DAP ... 8AXkA/edit

Edit: If you guys do read this please leave some feedback, I want to improve the story more but am unable to myself since being the creator I see nothing wrong with anything. Literately anything would help, ive been told there's some spelling errors but besides that there has to be some plot hole(s) i didn't fill in.

[Traendeth]

I predict the first chapter will be done in a week sorry for the inconvenience

[Traendeth]

The first chapter will be released with in a few hours to a day, I just need to do some editing and cleaning up. the second chapter will be available with in the week.

[Traendeth]

Chapters up, sorry for the wait editing takes alot longer when you have two nieces to look after :b

Any who if you have any comments or concerns please feel free to post your thoughts im always open to criticism

[Traendeth]

Ok its been quite a bit of time since i posted the first chapter. And since theres no posts here but mine, well i really dont know what to think. Ive got three chapters lined up (only need to edit them). Ill post the second one, if anyone thinks its any good ill post the rest.